All Comments on 'The Box Pt. 02'

Moving slowly...Not a bad story, but by this pace this will be "The never ending story"...3* again

Maybe you should delay further submissions until its complete. Can't even remember what the first installment was about.

Terri is developing nicely. Wonder why it seems daughter Ann and son are the same age. Are they Irish Twins, because in establishing these two characters there was no inference to Terri having twin children and this is a bit far into your work for us to be finding this out. Besides the time line, writing a something that includes twin children seems to always draw the writer into attempting to explain how these two people think and feel on a given subject and that is a distraction.

As to rate of change, the slow momentum of main character changing visa vie her line in the sand of acceptable reading material, is progressing just fine for the moment. There will come a time beyond Terri seeking change thru discovery which will need to both hold reader interest and pique reader need for more information. This will require more than a dozen paragraphs and I think you are up to the task. Don't let reader need for more chapters rush you into posting before you are comfortable with the work. Fans will wait a bit to read good work such as you are building here.

Loving it so far.

Keep some pussy hair on a babe. Makes them free thinking people.

More than happy with the quality of the content, but like other comments would like to see more in each part, or parts delivered more frequently

Don't wish to appear ungrateful though. Thanks for your efforts

It's going there at a glacial pace. The writing and dialogue are simply neither clever or interesting. It's like watching paint dry.

1 star.

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I gave this a 5 to offset the asshole of LIT's 1 vote!

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That the lady who lives in my phone also wrote really bad stories.