All Comments on 'The Broken Holiday'

Great Job!!!!!!!

Wonderful story :)

What an great story! I love that it had so much.

Very tasteful, very classy.

Thank you for sharing.

Thank you for writing such a great story :)

R x

Thank you for the Christmas gift that you shared with all of us.

wat an increible story about the true meaning of christmas and wat it is about birth ,miracles, good samaritans , and love

That was a beautiful story!

delightful, human, poignant - evocative of emotions within my heart. Thanks ... Martilias

impressive and a really beautifull story

keep it up - expecting more

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ToRmEnTiUm

why why why? Why do you torment me Jordan?

Release the f***** book already!!

For a romance, this story fires on all cylinders. I was drawn in at the very beginning and stayed interested throughout. The blending of the familiar with the unthinkable (yet all too real) was masterful. The characters were the life blood of this story and pulsed with real beating hearts and I became very attached to them. It takes an admirable creative talent to put a story this captivating and heart warming together.

Very well done!

You have written a wonderful, touching, can't put it down, Thank youI'm late for my meeting story. I will look for submissions from you and hope your Christmas time was peaceful and good to you. Thank you!

A well done story that is as my title says, touching and lovely. I await more stories from you, please.

I wish this had been out in time for the holiday contest! I think it could have won.

Very moving, and starting out in a completely unexpected direction. Well-written, sensitive and tasteful.

Beautifully done.

Deb

Oh, it was so perfect, I'm in love, tell the rest of Kyle and Noels story please!

One of the best short stories i have ever read!!! Please please PLEASE write a sequel!!!

What a beautiful, beautiful story. Maybe because its late and I'm tired, but thank you for the intense emotions of fear, sorrow, joy and lust I have just experienced while reading your fine, fine tale.

A plot worthy of Tom Robbins or even Kurt Vonnegut.

So tender. Like a quiet snowfall on a winter's night.

loved it. absolutely loved it. you have a talent, and i'm looking forward to seeing more of it.

I'd have given a 10 if I could. This is wonderful... :) Simply wonderful. Best short Lit E romance I've read so far. It's packed with warmth and love, and just perfect amount of eroticsm, and all that in one story that doesn't imply too-quickness or anything. I loved it so much <3

- Evee.

Wonderful. Beautiful, touching, sweet, sexy. Great story.

Not much I can say except to echo the sentiments of those who preceded me. Truly it was an outstanding experience. I emphatically second the motion for more. Meanwhile I relish the experience of reading the work of a most talented writer. Thank You. Thank You. Thank You.

I don't understand how this story is not at the top of the list. What a wonderfully well written story.

This is truly amazing. The story was so touching that I actually wondered why this wasn't at the top. This is a grand contrast to some of the the other stories that I have read on this site.

I strongly recommend that you keep on writing , and of course, write more!

I may be mistaken, but I believe this won some contest last year, perhaps the winter holiday one, if not perhaps one of the monthly contests. Pretty amazing writing, you don't read something of this caliber too often on Lit.

I liked it a lot, it was very strong and romantic.

What I didn't need was the explicit sex in it. This story would have been even better without that, somehow it made it into a two headed hydra :) pleasing all tastes. But that said, it was one of the very best I've read here. Cheers Yoron.

Your story is unique, highly creative, upbeat and yet just a little poignent, (but not enough to detract in any way). The characters are well developed, believable, & immanently kind. The sexual encounter was handled in an unobtrusive manner that fit right into the story. It is one of the steamiest sexual descriptions on this site. (even though it did not try to be overinclusive.) There is more to communication that can be described by science. The connection between a 6 month old & a newborn is very plausableto my mind. Don't ask me how I know,

I cannot explain it; I just know. (despite my 3 science degrees in chemistry and biology).

This tale is not just good it is spectacular. One of the top 5 on this site. It would be a great pleasure, & a superb surprise to see a new story from you.

All the best in whatever you do & wherever you go, long life & great joy.

Thnk you, Dan

When I started the story, I wasn't sure where an abandoned baby in a dumpster was going to fit into it. However, you really did an excellent job in weaving the story together. It was one of the best stories I've read on this site. Unfortunately, I can't give it a score higher than five, although I'd like to give it a ten. Thanks for sharing the story.

I have read this story a few times but for some reason I have never voted. Probably because I was trying to hide the tears from my wife. I am supposed to be an old macho truck driver and they dont shed tears do they? So tonight I read it again but this time I voted. Could not give it a score higher than 5 but I tried. Thank you for the story. Jim

Great story just wish for more

My only nitpick is the gender of the name Noel.

As I recall, Noel is the masculine version, and Noelle is the feminine version of the name.

@anon I have a female friend named Noel

Simple n beautiful, both the characters n story. I envy your gift.:-)

great piece of literature, keep up the good work

i loved it was a beautiful story although would love to hear more about the charecers how they came to get married did they have kids etc...

Reviews - the ever easy way to cast judgement on another's creativity, with no fear of retribution. These authors work hard to craft a tale woven inside their heads, share it with us, only to see it picked apart and criticized at near every conceivable angle. Rarely, an author comes with a story that seems to transcend simple expectations and give a reviewer something worth commenting upon.

This, in my humble opinion, is one of those tales.

Indeed, barring the few grammatical errors a professional editor would easily find, this story nears literary perfection. At just the right length, without exceeding description and being wordy, but maintaining brevity while being sagacious, this story was a joy to read. It inspires, comforts, entertains, and arouses, all at once.

Job well done, capturing the heart of Christmas, the joy of life, the intensity of passionate first-time love, and the compassion individuals can both abound in and completely lack.

thank you. thank you. what a lovely story. please write again.

Thank you for sharing this beautiful story. Loved it!

My favorite band <3

excellent start, ending has potential for more

I enjoyed reading your story.

Thank you.

If there is more like this in your imagination, please start writing again...outstanding.

Romance is probably the best Lit caegory, and this amazing story proved it. It's awesome when you find a way to "interact" with the reader through the characters. 5/5 definitely.

Sequel please?

Wonderful story, ,, a special moving tale so well told

This is one of those stories that just stands out from most other stories. Simply a perfectly well written "Feel Good" tale. My mood just went up a few notches - five stars :-)

This was the very first story I ever read on Literotica what now seems like so many years ago, and now that I've found it again, it's in my favorite's list. May God richly bless you and yours, thanks once again,

MoogPlayer

I am so glad I did.

Thank you for a beautiful story.

And I don't even celebrate Christmas! This story, however, feels so much like the genuine goodwill to all of humankind that seems to be the ultimate aspiration of the season that is being celebrated around me right now. Then the sex particularized the universal focussed in this couple and in the mother who understood the bonds that make life meaningful. A truly beautiful unity between the sacred and the profane that celebrates the fullness of the human experience—from discarded and left to die to loved in the warmth of a caring family. “God, please forgive her,” Took the story to the next level.

I experienced it as a masterpiece of understated power of love.

and very well written. I've read a lot of great stories on Literotica and this one ranks right up near the top. I was surprised to see the date it was submitted and wondered why I had never seen it or any of your other stories before. I was a little dismayed to see that you had submitted only four stories and then stopped. With your talent I would love to hear that story. I will definitely read the rest of your repertoire. Thank you for a beautiful experience.

of a Holiday

thanks

That was one of the sweetest stories I have ever read! Thank You Author!

Johnny

I loved it, I even wished it were longer, and Kyle's intuition about Noel's abandonment in the container would have been explained. Natalie knew of this connection, so she kept in touch every year and sent Kyle to find Noel.

However, I do not quite understand why Noel keeps the secret of visiting the old Brinkman and Sons store, she is able to make love with Kyle and yet keeps this visit a secret? I do not get it.

I suppose it has been the author's wish that it be so.

I would like to dedicate a song to this story, the Fleetwood Mac song "Beautiful Child", I think corresponds to this story.

I would love to have a sequel ...

5* for you.

I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.

What a fantastic story. These posters are all correct. It is truly wonderful.

This is the nth time I am reading this story. Fills me with hope for a future and a lot to ponder on. Contemplating Life from a different perspective. After all, there is hope for all of us. Please keep writing.

❤

This is a wonderful surprise To find a masterpiece among all of this porn! thank you,

Beautiful story. Thank You.

A little spooky , but happy to go along with the story line. Always enjoy a happy ending.

Read this during Christmas holidays. Wonderful, warming story.

I need to use my password, so I can write under my name instead of snooze. Until then, I really enjoyed this story. Have a great day!

This may be an ancient submission but it ticks all the boxes.

Such a well crafted tale - a brilliant start with well developed characters and natural conversations, great sex and a finish which makes the reader want to know more about how the story line continues.

The only sad part us that the author is not longer sharing stories with us.

Thank you for a beautifully presented romantic offering

This read was like a warm tea on a stormy night .. the cadence was just right

One of my all time top favorite stories. Thanks Author!

Johnny

Beautiful story!! Thank you. :)

Why is it the best stories are all too short and the author writes too few?

Well written, and involving. I couldnt help but become interested in the well drawn characters, and the well paced narrative. It is refreshing to enjoy a story written with good grammar, with no unnecessary padding. My compliments, and thanks, to this writer.

Thank you for this beautiful story!

A beautiful story! So much so that saying more can only illustrate the futility of trying to express it. Some things are just beyond words.