All Comments on 'The Business Conference'

How could you count with the panties in your mouth?

Therehas to be more to this story.

had to give this a one for the ending, leaving him tied up by himself is a big no-no was a 5* before that.

Because I'd like to give you the chance to make it right. As others already noted, "leaving him there like that" is not an option. A real Domme is responsible. Especially on the first encounter. Leaving a sub helpless like that is a breach of trust, a betrayal. It will destroy any relationship.

Obviously those 4 are a great team at work, so they also know each other to some extend and get around well. It's not surprising that the girls know each other a little more. But the situation created leads this to a tie, kind of. And the girls will be aware of that.

I would understand if the girls returned after taking a quick shower in another room to take him to dinner (the 3 girls surely don't share one half room - there must be at least one more, maybe also such a double-suite with 2 bedrooms?), which gives the writer a chance to create some stunning dialogues and even another short scene. I'd imagine Brooke gets rewarded with a strapon-fuck under the shower for making sure he's a bad boy and cums prematurely. During this Sara asks Jessika how to continue: "We can't leave him like this, can we?" - "No, we can't. When we're done here, he'll be punished enough for now." Brooke: "Ohh, don't slow down, this feels so good, but I'd love a double-filling with a cream pie tonight." Jessika: "Now, that doesn't sound too bad."

I bet you can take it from here ;)

To what the other commentators are saying. Erotica in order to be satisfying has to be believable. Leaving someone tied up for hours could be deadly. A case of hiccups, for instance, can strangle someone gagged; they can't get a proper supply of air and the three women return to a dead colleague. Oops. And people have died that way (being tied up and left unattended) because of stupid, unsafe, insane, and non-consensual, uninformed, poorly thought out BDSM play.

Superb story up-to-that-point. You have great potential; don't take the criticism personally.

Oh, in real life, the women would report him and he would be fired. But even in fantasy, logic should prevail.

This is alright, but I feel like it could really shine if the language and writing was polished up a little. I like the plot and it has a lot of potential if you added some sort of detail like the women were in some sort of polyamorous relationship.

Also, how can you have an 8 inch dildo AND panty gag in your mouth at the same time without passing out?

Okay, first of all, why would three girl sluts not check to make sure a door which had been used all day wasn't fully closed and locked?

Secondly, why didn't he point that out?

Thirdly, these were all co-workers and friends at the start. What happened simply wasn't his fault. The girls should have been pleading with him not to inform Mr. Johnson.

Lastly, why did they all have to be so goddamn mean about what they were doing?

Lots of 'dumb' in this story.

I thought it was great that they left him there! Maybe they left the door open on purpose.

I think you need to get an editor to check your story before publishing. There were at least a couple of continuity errors.

Good premise.

But story is not a winner.

No real teasing of him/his cock.

She stuffs panties in his mouth. He seems to be able to talk fine immediately thereafter. Then, for no reason, his voice is muffled. Inconsistent.

He says it's his fondest wish to get pegged? That doesn't make what follows anything like a "punishment". Better he should be forced into being pegged, fearful of it. That'd be "punishment" -- at least initially.

Two stars.

Wonder how he manages to answer the girls with a wad of panties in his mouth ?