All Comments on 'The Business men Pt. 01-02'

from a writer with a penchant for cuckoldry.

Wife goes from staunch catholic to gang-banged slut in one afternoon to full on hot wife tagged. A little too far fetched for the imagination...

I realize that this is just a fantasy, but I don't understand why anyone would even want to fantasize about having a wife who was just a disgusting pig. Total turn off. Wouldn't touch this woman with a 10 foot pole.

I would love to touch her with my little pole. She could be fun.

Repetitive, no emotional connection to the work, no effort to hekp us understand or build rapport with Lisa or her husband.

off real good, but after chapter 6 it just went down hill. I still enjoyed you story.

Do us a favor don't waste our time, keep your stories to your self

In short, this was painful to read.

Was everything that makes a good story.

What a waste! Hey do us a favor and fuck off you sicko! Nobody likes cuckie little pervs!!!

and die

Loved it, maybe a little slow to begin and a little rushed in the end, but I am hoping you will have a sequel

Pretty hot and good ending for ur slut wife..

Glad I don't know you, not erotic piece of shit.

to like this your I. Q.would be no higher then ten and as far as the idiot who is anonymous and complaining about other people comments he would win the cup for idiot of the year, i'm sure he is just a sicko with a big mouth.

I struggled to make it through page one, but finally I just had to stop. If English is not your first language, I would suggest that you find someone who can assist you. This was incomprehensible.

Use contractions with your dialog please.

Wat disgusting women id pore bleach on her pussy arse and mouth ,the husband is one fuckin pervert, no man in real world would want diseased whore 4 wife, hope they all get aids and stds

be married and write a story like this!

Serious penalty for 'piling on' in football...also in writing erotica! This is dramatically too repetitive, and even more dramatically unbelievable. Other negative aspects include spelling and grammar atrocities and incomprehensible passages,

2*

Lickedey, i don't see any stories on YOUR page.

and yet every critique i see has you flaming authors.

Maybe put up or shut up.

Just because you have a screen name, rather than 'anon' does not mean you're not a troll.

if you don't like it, go away... Maybe you'll like the stories in Highlights

It was too much for a story. It should have been split to chapters.and published separately.

And... 45 men? Too much.

What a load of crap! Go and pay for it and finally lose your virginity, then maybe you'll get a faint inkling of what fucking a woman is really like!

One of hundreds of unbelievable stories about a husband who loses his wife and doesn’t get it. May the blue bird of happiness drop something from the sky to represent the undercurrent of these stupidity

Tired old ir shit posted in LW by an asshole should know better.

The comment below by 26thNC is wrong. He’s the only asshole who posts tired old shit.