All Comments on 'The Butterfly Pt. 02: Pillow Talk'

For the story.

Your inability to write a complete sentence is remarkable. So is the inability to write anything hot or remotely interesting.

A transcendent love is one that is beyond human understanding. Which is a great relief because I can't understand this one.

Good hot story, thanks.

Maybe a couple of dirty thoughts put to paper. But not a story. No stars.

If they liked to live like this...keep going...2*

hot story, hot concept. good job.

She is such a nympho that not only does she want 3 men, finishing with her husband - but even if Peter is tired, she forces him to get it up a 3rd time, for her pleasure (not very considerate of her). I would have thought she'd want a rest instead, as her sex is probably red, inflamed, and sore by now. But hey, as a fantasy, it works. This is already the second chapter, and I don't sense much of a story, yet - hope it'll pick up shortly.