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All Comments on 'The Call Girl'

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kiwiplumkiwiplumover 13 years ago
editor

Good story line but so many wrong tenses and incorrect english took away a bit of the excitement. Hope you can get an editor for the next chapter

MissCaitMissCaitover 13 years ago
I second the editor comment!

Definitely get an editor. And try to slow down...your narrative feels a little rushed. Good story, though!

FirebrainFirebrainover 13 years ago
She realises he's her rapist..

...and she has an orgasm?

Whuh-huh?

johnnyjonesjohnnyjonesover 10 years ago
So...

... Now it's 2014... No stories since 11... Is there a chance this is going to be continued?

Jhbrown27Jhbrown27over 4 years ago
Good story

As far as it got.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

Grade it a 1 - a waste of time

8796Porno8796Porno6 months ago
Too bad ...

this one is not finished.

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