All Comments on 'The Captain's House Ch. 02'

I like this! Nice style for the story theme.

One nit-pick, though: I guess the ampersands are supposed to evoke an 18th century feel? For me, they're more annoying than anything else. In some places where they're dense, they look like a collection of bird droppings scattered around the paragraphs. :-)

That aside, good stuff!

I never thought of the ampersands that way....thank you, I will watch out for using too many of those from now on!