All Comments on 'The Champion's Companion Ch. 05'

get a proofreader! I can 'barley' keep count of the use of 'the' instead of 'that', 'then' or 'they', 'a' instead of 'and' or 'I', 'more that' or 'smaller then' instead of 'than', and I still imagine the 'calvary' charging.

It really spoils the reading pleasure of a story that is very enjoyable and has a lot of potential.

Overcomplicated

Good ideas and story line but terrible writing. This makes it very difficult to read and confusing.