by jonthechaosman
Way too short!!! You just left us hanging!! Now I am on pins and needles. Hurry up and finish!!
cheating is a mental fetish carried on by either immature or mentally challenged individuals
This was a bit abrupt. I'm counting on a chapter 3. It's a good story line, and your characters are all in believable spots, don't let me down! I gave a 5 hoping there is more. If not......I'm hunting you down to take my five back.
This is an unusual story but I had fun reading it and imagining the different mindsets of the three players.
You do a good job with your writing overall and it is easy to read.
I do wish you'd do longer chapters.
I gave you 4* on the first chapter and * on this second one, hopefully to encourage you to write more and to lengthen the chapters with relevant information, maybe even advancing the storyline further before you call it a day on any given chapter.
Best regards,
-Pultoy
I meant to say, '5*' on this second chapter in my previous comment, sorry.
-Pultoy
Unfortunately, falling in love with someone is a necessary risk in any sexual activity. At least your story captures that truth.