by leigh_cheri
A little too short but still HOT!
I'd also think that there should have been more detail... but MORE please
Started too quick and was over quickly too. I thought a good story was building, then wham-bam-thank-you ma'am. Great first effort though. Next time prolong the build up and the sex.
Glad to know there is an appetite on this site for more build-up (which I personally like too!)... the next one will be longer. Thanks for the feedback!
But hot sex in 1500 words? This feels like an etude, not a sonata, or concerto or a symphony.