All Comments on 'The Club of Fools Ch. 07'

Please tell me you won't end this on a cliff hanger?

No, it will finish.

You made a small error in your story that other writers have made. You have Kwan paint his toenails red after he had his black hose and stiletto shoes put on his feet. His toenails needed to be done before that happened. Also since Kwan was a movie makeup artist, why didn't she mention that they could put on false eyebrows to hide his eyebrows being shaped, when he needed to be dressed as a man. I am surprised that you did not have Jason try to outbid the price that he was sold for since he is supposed to be so wealthy. That could have been an interesting and funny conversation, since Jodi was the real buyer for $0. But they could see how much Jason would pay to be free. Keep up writing these stories. The ones that I have read are mostly enjoyable.

RJ

You said, "Like this story."

Well, thank you very much; you're too kind.