All Comments on 'The Collapse Ch. 01'

Very well written, is this a prediction for our future? May not be too far off.

Was hoping that the relationship would develop further but I guess that's for other chapters.

At any rate I enjoyed reading your Story, I say Story because it was one and not a few pages of sucking and fucking and a Monster cock, I thank you for that.

Thank you!

Glad to see you back on here.

Your stories are almost allways very good, and this is no exception, even though it's kind of different from many of your other stories (thicker cock, less pain, perhaps due to a change in your own life?).

What I wonder about is if this will continue with more slave girls being added to the harem (like the raped series) or if the the violent and barbaric theme hinted at (bloodsports as entertainment says a whole lot) will take the story in a new direction. And by that I don't mean mr Evans becoming cruel, but that he might be killed and Amy taken by the killer as his rightful spoils (regardless if he's killed by enemies attacking the town and looting it, or by a competitor within).

Either way would be good and I will monitor your page for signs of an update... :-)

Iv never read a story on here good enough for me to actually post a comment...this story will be added to my book maks and the link will be emailed to all my friends. The back story its self is extreamly well done. Thank you for making such art...whens ch. 2 come out?

Love the stories and am glad to see you posting once more

Keep the story moving along please.

Looking forward to Chap 2

HELL YEAH!

It's my fave add more to it I beg u

I love the post-apocalyptic setting. I also love that Mr. Evans is dominant and uses Amy without consent, but isn't a misogynistic rapist either.

Finally, so happy to see you writing again!! I always make it a point to check if you've got any new uploads and was delighted to see this today. :)

Your previous work was usually very good and this new story seems to have a lot of promise; I have enjoyed reading it and feeling the extra depth of sensuality which you seem naturally to project into your writing (or is it a revelation?) compared with most other writers here. Your writing seems to be living rather than mechanical; something that happens rather than being DONE. I have felt in your other stories too that your rejoicing expression of sexuality potentially has, in it, the full depth of the life phenomenon, past present and future, and that orgasm, especially mutual orgasm around sperm squirting into possible fertilization, is life undergoing a spasm of rejoicing in itself and its remarkable potential for renewal and extension. Please provide us with more chapters!

Lovely as always. Hope there's more to come (and soon.)

Continue!!!

Yes it's great to have an owner who exercises complete control yet manages to make the slave happy and is not brutal. But - and it is a big 'but' - at some point she will disappoint him; at some point he will be angry with her; at some point she will have a rival. He has already hit her; is that a hint of dark things to come? Do whips and clamps and racks await her, and/or the auction block and a cruel owner?

Disappointing name choice. All I think about is breakfast when i realized his name is Bob Evans.

"She laughed when she said that when the time finally came for her to want to have a baby she wasn't able to because between her birth control and all the men she had been with something it happened to her and she just couldn't have a baby. I could tell that made her sad."- it fits in the story and the perspective of the girl and older woman who seems to be pro slavery. Still this line is pretty cringy. Great writing though.

Please write a ch. 3 and 4 or even more in this series, the whole theme of a dominant older slave owner who isn't abusive or shares his fertile young property is the best erotica. You write the best erotica here. Especially the idea that there is sexual slavery in an age with no contraception gives a man total power over his slave but not being too bad.

Nothing good would come from this decision if it caught on like you assumed it would.

It would be an utter disaster, world wide.

Nice idea for a story though.

I really liked how the "Naked in School" Story Universe caught on with about 20+ authors. I wish a Voluntary Slavery Story Universe where the slaves have few choices after they commit would do the same thing. contact me if you agree.

This is a story that sort of grows on you. Interesting and imaginative.

I keep revisiting this wonderful story, the detailed prepper/An-Cap future that is portrayed, the excellently written sex scenes with all the coercion, impregnation, and that thrill of knowing Amy has no choices or freedoms and accepting that fact. Not a cliched big cock/master and slave magically fall in love story that we usually get here.