All Comments on 'The Come Up'

Nice start, but it is hard to tell with less than a full page. I prefer at least two pages per chapter . That gives few the reader a better idea of where the story is headed.

I hope that this is the start of a series. Well written, spelling and grammar are good. (It's sad that a comment like that is even necessary but some stuff posted on the site are dreadful.)

This story has created a frame and brushed in some key parts of the character. Please continue.