All Comments on 'The Comforter Pt. 01'

I can see this story continuing. Kate, Michel, and only the author knows who else could join and please the Boss. Hope you keep it rolling.

A very well put together story started slowly and I'm interested at see what your coming up with in Part II

noun, Anatomy

1. a fold of mucous membrane partly closing the external orifice of the vagina in a virgin.

Since Andrea was not a virgin this made no sense. Still, the premise was cute and I applaud your effort.

After looking up the thing about the hymen, I kinda get what the problem was. So, yeah, horrible, HORRIBLE choice of words. Anywho, I appreciate these kinds of comments. It helps for future reference.

Maybe try rewriting this... in English!

". . .pulsating with erroneous heat." An actual phrase used in your story. Spellcheck on your computer is no substitute for a human editor.