by superonefifty
... and really enjoyed it! Thank you for writing so well for us; a little more attention to the details; punctuation, capitals - things that can easily be sorted out with a careful bit of proof-reading - would have made this a five star story.
As it stands, I have given it four; I hope to be able to make that five when you submit your next copy.
Well done.
It's not my thing, but you write so eloquently that I truly enjoyed it.
This story was amazing!! I absolutely loved it! At the end, when he tells her all that he will expect, you really built it up for me, and I'd absolutely LOVE to read more of the story!!!!!! You should write more of it, please... xD