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by snowlove

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Rawmaster50Rawmaster50over 11 years ago
Confusing

You have a true gift of descriptive phrases, capturing a moment in the narrative, but I think you need to work on the details of plotting or have more sex. I feel this is a fragment of a larger story that you need to work on as this seems disconnected. Keep writing as I feel you will do better things in the future.

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