by BlueMuffin
Couldn't help but notice that several of the ideas I'd mentioned on the last chapter were in this one -- dunno if you'd already planned for them, or if you decided to include them because people talked about them, but that really doesn't matter.
'Cause it worked :D
Page 3. Their is a belonging to a person, there is a place. So it should be " If he was going to discover there" . Trust me when I say grammar checks do not always work to fix a sentence.
finally.....u hv him utilising some form of magic......go go go.....waiting for more with bated breath
A nit pick i know, but Samson's weapon of choice was the jawbone of an ass, David used the sling. Can't wait to read more.
Wasn't that the guy whose obscene strength came from the length of his hair?
I thought he just fought barehanded…
in sted of letting Talia's house and land be split up and destroyed steve should take it over and have a house with eatch tribe
Awesome story so far. Keep up the spirit! Just wondering if there will be a male god in the pantheon (and his worshippers would act like "Hey, we're the only one who worship a dude - WE ARE THE DEVINE EXCEPTION, BITCHES!")
great work so far, can't wait for more chapters to come out. If you can make them longer as they are fantastic to read.
Also a great idea would be to magically transform Sarah into a more sexy creature, undoing the magic that stopped her from developing into a mature female
you should give what that werewolf malcome is up to been thinking about the horse girl he caught.I also hope there is a threesome better Steve ,Sarae and the lizard Saltek
Thank you all for your comments.
I have received a number of emails telling me to hurry my ass up and finish chapter 6.
It should be uploaded to Literotica today or tomorrow.
Sorry for the delay, dogs get married, kids need maintenance, cars get tapeworm, etc.
As ever your comments and criticisms are my inspiration to keep writing.
I fucking died of laughter when he farted. I was laughing so hard I was crying lmao! I love your style. If this was published I would buy it in a heartbeat