All Comments on 'The Darkness Prevails'

by Otktlc

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JustFuckMeJustFuckMeover 16 years ago
???

What makes this BDSM? The fact she was tied up at the end? This seems a better fit for NonConsent/Reluctance. Also, was there a preceding chapter? If not, then I would suggest adding in something about why the Prince is acting this way and what exactly it is that will be happenning tomorrow, or give us a hint anyway. Also, you have a lot of typos, maybe use spellcheck next time.

Persoanlly, I didn't find it to be erotic but that's a pretty subjective call so take that with a grain of salt.

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