All Comments on 'The Day We Did Janey Ch. 02'

What the fuck are you, 12? Learn how to write a godamn story.

Timmy??? Really????

As the original commentator on Chapter 1, I hate to have to say it, but I felt let down by Chapter 2. I was looking forward to a very edgy pleasure / pain scenario. I think a situation where Janey was pushed to her pain limits before morphing into extreme pleasure would have been highly erotic.

It’s almost as if you lost the enthusiasm once Literotica rejected your original follow up. Maybe in those circumstances it would have been better to forget about a Chapter 2, even it meant leaving us in suspense - dare I say ‘Cruel to be Kind’?

I don’t know if it's even possible, but I would be most interested in reading the rejected version.

Thanks for posting. A truly interesting and relevant comment. Sure, I can send you the original if you send me your email address. Not too much different, but a little harder core on the stun gun... I essentially just went back and toned down things. Such is the rule of editors.

Now, if you want REALLY EDGY pleasure/pain, check out my book "Naked Town, Naked Lives," by--one of my pen names--Ellen Pierce Melville. Now there, you get it full blast. You might like to know that I published this book, chapter by chapter, in Literorica, and had no problems. It is FAR more BDSM than the rather tame Ch. 2 on Janey--even in the original. So Literotica has tightened up. But I have published here a story easy to find--"Lady Bildoe Torments the Barbarian Chieftain." Reader after reader commented that they were getting "a nice buzz" before the ending...than which a writer cannot get more S as in BDSM. I should be ashamed. But check out "Naked Town, Naked Lives." It is cheap as an e-book and it is my concerto of pleasure/pain, my own clit lashed into orgasm... Thanks again for commenting.