All Comments on 'The Debate Team Pt. 04'

I'm sorry, I couldn't read pass page 1. Too much fucking and talking about and with Paul and his "bulge."

I'm sorry you don't know the difference between pass and past

Dafunks, I'm assuming your reply about "pass and past" is to a comment I left at 1:00am regarding your story. Of course I know the difference, just like I'm sure there are grammatical errors in your work that I did not point out. But as I said before, I didn't read PAST the first page and that's the real issue, you didn't like what I said. I could have really blasted this story but I didn't. In a Lesbian Sex Category Dafunks, it's writing 101, to capture the readers interest, make them want to read more. FOR ME, it didn't do that. The first page was a turn off. I am just one person and one story doesn't fit all. When you post stories on a public site, you have to be open to criticism. Dafunks, I wish you the best and happy writing.

Writing PAST was deliberate cause it doesn't matter if I misspell a word, I'm not the author/writer. I am a lesbian that loves erotica.

Past - of a former time; Pass - go by. Anyway, it's mute as far as I'm concern. Good luck

Okay I apologies. I was quick to take offense and I responded badly. Been thinking of my comment for a long time but never got around to changing it. I fully understand what you're saying and I think it was my mistake to put it in the Lesbian category.

I guess it's also the problem with all types of porn. Lesbian porn videos are actually meant for guys' entertainment and not for actual Lesbians and, sadly, I fell to the same flaw.

My mistake on all counts. Putting into the wrong category and then being curt and overly sensitive in my response.

I have one "but" though with respect to your comment about being turned off by the first part of the story and it's that this is part 4 of a series. But then again maybe I should not have put it in the Lesbian category.

I apologize again for what I said. I worked hard on writing these and, from a writer's perspective, it's kinda hurtful to hear someone say that they couldn't get past the first part of the 4th part of a story you worked hard on. It's like saying to the writer of a TV series that "I tried to watch your TV series today. I picked out episode 4 and couldn't get past the first 3 minutes." I hope that made sense.

Anyway, thank you for your feedback. I now appreciate it more.

i had a problem with this too but recognizing it was part of a series I did try hard to go back and read the whole series, but the truth is I just don't care for this type of grunt'n fuck story. There's no depth to the characters, no meaningful huan interaction. It's just male fantasy and frankly pretty damned stupid and ignorant.

You need to recognize that there are many women who read and watch porn. It may be predominantly by and for men, but you presume to much and display your ignorance as a writer by failing to grasp the difference between lesbian and straight sex.This story turned me off. I read in the lesbian sex category because I'm a lesbian wanting a lesbian thrill. I don't read in this category to be pummeled by another ignorant male fantasy.

Next time, post your dibble in a different category!

Hey anonymous lesbian, if you read my comment above yours you would see that I already apologized for it. Good day, Angry Anonymous Lesbian.

Hey I was still curious as to if u could make a side story or even just a chapter about alex. Idk he just seems like a cool character that would be interesting to see grow more. Or just get a description. He's a character that I think could have a interesting side story going on, and it would help fill in some parts if u need to

Yes there is a side story to him. The you may not have noticed but I already planted the seed.