All Comments on 'The Dream'

I love the raw sex. Fantastic job for first time. This sounds real to me? Is this more than a dream? Is this guy your boyfriend. If this character is you your hot beyond belief. I jacked off after reading this.I plan on taking a shower like this with my girl friend tonite.

That was a great first effort. I look forward to reading more of your work.

This is so very real sounding I think this new author has done this or is a very, very sexual gal ! I hope she keeps writing ! Tom in Oregon loved it !!!!!

A good first effort. Some lack of foreshadowing. Hint at something then make us wait a couple paragraphs will make you a very good writer. This can be utilized several times in a story. Spread them out and even overlap with the first hint not being resolved until after other plays have commenced. The paragraph that begins with, "Gobs of thick semen dribble..." strikes me as odd, weak and misaligned. Cumming, then an orgasm, then cumming, doesn't ring well. Perhaps the opening line was never edited out?

You are bright and show the skills of a great writer.

Couldn't help but explode! Lucky guy!

That was so fucking good! You don't know how much I want to fuck the hell out of you, your big, luscious tits smashed against the shower's glass, as I pull your hair back for a rough kiss, my hips pounding your aching pussy.

I know you got off big time writing this. And I got off just as hard. This story is a keeper, in my "favorites", so I can revisit the fantasy of hot shower sex with YOU. Thanks for writing such an inspirational scene. Please write a series about a very sexual, hot ass bitch who loves to seduce and fuck whomever she sets her eyes on.

And, btw, when you shoved three slick fingers up his ass to milk his prostrate so you could selfishly gulp down more cum, that was fucking awesome!

What a delicious slut you are!

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Absolutely loved it!

Freebird 49

Kept me hard the entire time!

i wish it had been me in this story my cock is hard reading it

Getting my shaven balls sucked, then cumming with my cock shoved down a talented throat while it spasms around my throbbing cockhead. You are perfect

I hope you write more. It was well done. Left me wanting that woman.

Very nice start, tabbymidnite...nicely written fantasy. I would have liked to be in that shower with you ;) soap in hand.

Keep it up, try another theme; take your time and make it longer, with a slow buildup to the real action. Some of us like it that way!

Fantastic writing, I love that you share the cum, I would love to shower with you, and everything else,, oh yes! Lots more,,

Thank you for a great orgasm,, more please?

However, it is too short. Surely a Chapter two could be polished and submitted.

Thanks Don

Your story style really drew me in, and I need more! I especially enjoyed how you described the blowjob in the shower, and I could imagine the lucky dude sitting in the tub while your female character rides him for all they're worth!

Hope you will share another story soon...

Each time I read this, your dream becomes my own; such is a testament to your skill, and I can't wait for more of you!

Nice job on your first story. Your passion is real. I don't see other stories posted. Keep writing.

Wow. One erotic read. You should write more. Would love to read more of your dreams and fantasies. Xx

I had a full figured woman like you once. I found her on a single’s dating site. When she invited me to her place I knew I had to ‘thank’ her for the date. I moaned a little when she bent over in front of me, trying to tease her with my wanton attention. She found me aroused and I told her to take it out. She asked me to masterbate for her and then titty fuck her. Then she took me to her bed and I gave her oral attention as she directed me, going where she asked. After she requested my insertion and delivery, I asked if I should clean her. She said no, that she wanted to bask in the leak fluid. That was all we did as I called and spoke to her daughter, and that upset her. I often wondered if I was expected to revisit her to atone for my transgession. Who knows what I would have agreed to do for and to her for the repairations? Write more, Lady.

Bruce

I just happen to really have a guy use my whole body for his sexual pleasure!

Orpheum69