All Comments on 'The Ducal Pet Ch. 02'

I think the story is good, but a bit hard to read because you switch point of view frequently in the same paragraph. I don't read for the grammar, and will read the next chapter if there is one. I just wanted to let you know it can be a bit confusing and distracting when the first sentence says Clair, the second says me, mine ect, and the third goes back to Clair/her. I post this trying to be helpful.

Its amusing that the true animals are the weak royal's. I hope she cuts both his heads off and the female count, what a flithy bitch. I did enjoy the story though

I love the idea and I like reading the story, but it keeps switching from third to first person and that's confusing.

Elizabeth Bathery. The Elizabeth Bathery? Renowned serial killer who bathed in blood to stay young? Because if that is so I would love to read the rest of this story...

Very good story but I was disappointed by the changes from third person to first , sometimes instead of Gabriel, sometimes instead of Claire !

So ... who you really are ? :-)

Xmax

Too short, continue the serious in longer chapters in more detail.

Change from first person to third in the same sentence ruined entire story for me. Good storyline, but due to grammatical errors couldn't really get into it...