All Comments on 'The Fairy and I - Prologue'

You have left an open end.

I hope this means there will be more.

A 5 from me.

Like the title says

A good start but please proofread or get an editor before continuing. Entirely too many simple spelling and grammar mistakes for about 1300 words.

Definitely continue please. Hope to see the next chapter very soon (perhaps a much longer one please).

Very nice, please give us more.

Thank you all for your nice comments, and critiques! I'm so sorry I've been away, and i'm currently writing the next one. Thank you all for your patience. :)

Pick a tense, any tense, and stick with it. Spell check is a wonderful tool. I tend to try not to be a grammar cop but sometimes, it's just too distracting.

On the other hand, I love seeing people do things they enjoy. So, write on, man!

Then write for yourself. Ignore negative comments unless you want to improve.

Using same word to start consecutive sentences, eg She. There are many ways to get around this, you just need to be creative.

Story jumped without describing the cause, or how it got to the next part. Don't rush to the next part, take your time and describe what is happening.

Descriptions were hard to understand, eg the forest.

Read what you have written. This should fix some incorrect words, like weary instead of wary. Spell checking will not find wrong words, only words not in your program dictionary.

Your tense was all over the place. Keep to past tense as present tense can be disastrous to read. Eg making his breakfast became present tense.

Read some of the top rated stories to see how they structure the story, the paragraphs and the sentences.

loved the story, little short for my likes, but I still enjoyed it. cant wait to read the other chapters...