All Comments on 'The Fall Ch. 03'

Fantastic milieu you've set up - these are all such great stories. Good but fucked up people. Real, but not my reality, so it pulls me in.

You have such interesting characters in your stories. Thank you for sharing them.

Another fantastic installment. I'm pretty sure I've been to that "Sunday lunch" many times with the same assortment of characters. Great stuff 5*

and I suspect difficult to write. Portraying their relationship as it transitions to deeper and more difficult levels is well done, but obviously a real challenge. You are probably making it too obvious that Lydia has some terrible secret that will impact their relationship, but at least you are keeping it concealed if the impact is definitely negative. A very tense and disturbing chapter. Can't wait to read what comes next.

Thanks for that.

The shifting internal dialogue from Lydia to Dylan (I didn't realize their names are almost an anagram) to Cyrus, corresponds well with each's personality. I hate when a writer creates characters whose speech and mannerisms are identical.

Dylan's stoned musings during "mirror" sex are especially funny. But Lydia's Sunday and Monday drunk - what a painful debacle she seems to be headed for. Very poignant.

*****Very interesting series. Thanks for sharing.