All Comments on 'The Fallen Ch. 01'

Thanks for sharing.

Looking forward to seeing the next chapter hope it won't be too long in appearing.

forward to the next chapter!

Very well thought out, written, and presented. Keep going.

Truly amazing writing, keep going! If you've not seen this, you may like it too. You both have the same amazing insight into people and what it means to be human.

https://www.literotica.com/s/god-of-mischief-and-lies

-S.

this story. Can't wait for more! Thanks for sharing

I just submitted chapter 2, so it should be up in a couple of days ;)

You've set up an interesting cast of characters, and gotten Erykah and Danni off to a good start. I was a bit concerned with a couple of grammar problems at the start (apologizes instead of apologies in the intro was glaring), but they seemed to be the only ones.

Lots to be curious about... like is Thomas really dad? Does Chris have any powers? If the mom was human, what is the dad and what are the twins?

I'm not into lesbian stories but am interested enough in the storyline to give the next chapter a go.

Thank you.

Not finished after 5 years. Don’t waste your time.

The story hasn’t even really started and the author stops and gives up. So don’t even bother thinking that you can read it and get half a story, the characters are not even fully set up by the end of chapter 4.