All Comments on 'The Fallen Ch. 04'

cool loving it keep up the good work!!!

Just gets moar better!

Your work is fantastic, but I personally am not in to bg sex. So this will probably be the last one I read, sorry.

I really enjoy the world you are building and want to read more.

Thank you for the time and effort you are putting into this and, for posting the results here for my enjoyment.

Had a lazy Saturday afternoon to fill when I started the first chapter.........then I didn't put it down until I had read them all!

Good story line, nice pace, as the story progresses the characters get more depth.

Look forward to your next instalment, keep them coming:)

The last two sentences saved the story for me, I'll actually be reading the next chapter.

Enthralling story. Please share more. Love the characters and all of it!

I read a few pages and it desperately needs a rewrite or an editor.

Proof you can't please everyone, I suppose. Lol.

well done!

thanx for posting...

waiting for next part...

I am really liking this. Waiting patiently (I lie :)

Have you noticed that some people are so very good that they crap all over themselves instead of appreciating a good read. (i.e. "akward...pass")

For those who've been following and enjoying my story I'd like to say sorry for my absence. Had some important "life stuff" take place that drew my full attention for a time.

I've logged in a few times to do a little reading, but not much else these past few weeks.

I'm back with a vengeance and working hard on chapter 5. Thank you for your patience!

that life is treating you better than before. I'm looking forward to you continuing this great tale.

I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter! Thank you for sharing it here.

Please continue this!!!

forgotten about you or this awesome story. Please continue with this tale.

i love this story already read it 3 times i hope its going to be continued :)

this seems like itpc all over again ... still hope its going to be continued though

This story is very good. Please continue it.

Must have more

Read all four chapters again (for the third time) and pleading for a continuation!!!

PLEASE give us an ENCORE!!!

Come back. This story is so good. Please finish it up.

i guess this story is officially dead by now ... but i dont want to give it up pleeeeeeease continue it :(

I agree with the previous comment, please continue!

Please do not let this be the end, love. Your writing is like poetry, the story flows like a mountain creek. Your sense of humor, give the story personality, and soul. I can without the shadow of a doubt say, that you are one of only three authors to date, that has moved me like you have. And i am a truly voracious reader, consuming any text i can get my hands on. When i give praise, it carries tremendous weight, and is never given lightly.

Please make another chaptet! You have a natural flair for this story please don't leave it as a cliffhanger.

This is a wonderful story. Please continue it.

any idea when the next chapters gonna be?

Amazing as always I'm going to follow you.

What a waste of time.

While the story is somewhat interesting, there is something about the way the author used the tense or the perspective of the story to the reader that just doesnt sit well with me. It makes it difficult to read and its not natural feeling. Keep at it, you will only improve with time.