All Comments on 'The Fat Older Men Change'

I appreciate that English is not your first language, and probably not even your second language, and with that in mind, I have to say you have done a remarkably good job in getting the sense of the story across. However, I still think you need to find a native English-speaker to read this for you and mark where the errors in tenses and participles are occurring, as it still reads like a story written in a foreign language then auto-translated by Google.

So glad that you didn't hold back on the hot sex aspect, and you covered all the bases with oral, vaginal, and most refreshingly, anal sex. I' also like the idea of focusing in on interracial sexual relations.

I enjoyed reading this story. I like the fact that you did not take too long to get your characters fucking. Well done.

Well written, I enjoyed it throughout. Thank you.

Love this story. Makes my pussy drip. It has always been my dream to look after a group of older fat men and to pleasure them as often as they like. Great story. Thank you.