All Comments on 'The First Date'

You need to carefully proofread for Pellington, grammar and typos. Otherwise, old story

Wow, I'm more guilty than you.

I read your story and wrote a brief comment. Your story was good but had typos, spelling and minor grammar errors that distract from the yarn.

My brief comment had so many typos (automatic spell check corrections) that I am embarrassed. Sorry , sort of the pot calling the kettle black.

Superb...I paid you the ultimate compliment..Twice!

Great premise and scenes, but I felt like the flow was a bit off. Some actions and scenes seem to end to abruptly ...maybe expand a bit more to have your scene well rounded and not choppy. Minus some distractions....the voyeurism is hot. Would have like to see your female character more developed in her innocent seduction.. Keep writing!!