All Comments on 'The First Time'

by allysynn

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LittleTommyTudorLittleTommyTudorabout 11 years ago
good start

A nice short story for your first submission. A sequel is in order don't you think?

btxpsbtxpsabout 11 years ago
Great First Story

Keep it up

gotranegotraneabout 11 years ago
Nice Start!

Nice start to, hopefully, a series. Keep Writing and I'll keep reading.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
SEEMS THE LADIES ENJOYED THEMSELVES

What next after this tryst?

R U planning on these characters remaining in contact both as friends and as lovers?

After a few encounters will they plan to work as a team to seduce another person they did not go to school with?

Good start. Please continue.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
give us some more

more please :)

OliviaBeaumontOliviaBeaumontabout 11 years ago
OMG.

Mmmmmm. Think I might go and open a bottle of bubbly, lock the door, pull the curtains and read that again, very very slowly. Devine.

Olivia (becoming more curious by the day !!!)

ErotonautErotonautabout 11 years ago

Rather perfunctory, and would have benefited from editorial assistance.

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