All Comments on 'The First Time'

I laughed all the way through. But this is one of the best dialog exchanges I've ever seen on Lit:

"Baby how long is your dick?" I asked.

"10", mom," he answered.

"Baby, you're very healthy," I said.

"Do you want me to take out some?" he asked.

Looking forward to more.

...sometimes I make the mistake of looking for erotica here...

Hardest thing for a slavic speaker/writer to learn is to use articles. just a little bit over the top. but if that is the way they do things in rusky.

How bad can writing be, well read this could it get any worst this person never seen or read a book i'm sure.

disjointed and convoluted...please have someone that speaks English, proof read your next story

FaithfulJuile? Nah, that's a joke. Just like this story.

This one should be in "Incest", not "Loving Wives". LW is for women who have sex with men they're not married to, and not biologically related to.

I really liked the first half of this story, until the spring break turned incestuous - I just wasn't expecting it. Almost should be two separate stories, IMO.

Julie, you wrote a great and exciting story. I look forward to more of your erotic tales

There is a special category for this tale. It's called the TRASH CAN. No stars at all.

All in all, a fun storey, but it was 2, 3 or maybe more stories in one. The sex with John, the husband having knowledge of all her other new men, (that got to be a few too many), and then the sex between and with her kids. It sort of ruined good erotica.

Perhaps try again, but keep your themes separate and in separate stories.

Learn spelling and grammar.