by empty_coffee_cup
Gee I got so caught up in the story I could actually feel the train moving, feel the press of the crowded car, feel his embarassment....very good!
Could not stop reading t ill the end,superbly written.
Waiting for next part now
Loved it! Had me hard half way through first page and ejaculating in my pants before the end. Had a simular experience when two neighbor ladies "caught" me sunbathing in the nude on my deck. Long-story-short they ordered me to jack off for them, and if I didn't would tell the wife what they saw. Wished one of them would have stroked me to climax but that didn't happen.
If a man did that to a woman he'd be hauled to jail quick, fast, and ina hurry. Being female should not make difference. A sharp elbow to the tits would've stopped that shit.
Very different from the stuff i usually read- very good!
Really liked his conflicted thoughts and the womans dirty talk. Calls for a sequel shood be heard. Again brilliant stuff.
Also- to the person who wrote that the story described 'assault'- it's fantasy and i've seen lots worse written about women being assualted
Geez, sigh...ANOTHER predictably, consistently high quality red-HOT smUte from coffee cup.
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u r triple sss ! very well written piece . can imagine that the author had alot of fun composing this as well as sharing it with others like the story did also. very believeable so even more exciting to read ... keep it up ... oops well hope to read much more from u ......subdewboi
dont be disappointed by the 'almost' i was reading this with my family in the room and got incredibly hard. I had my hand down my sweat pants behind my cushion and was stroking away but couldnt allow myself to cum. Love the story, would love to read some more
Very well written, with a teasing touch of reality for everyone to imagine sharing...
Wow! And a personal from Jane Marwood. Now that is a coo. I really enjoyed your well written and wickedly imagined story. Looking forward to more.
I liked very much the slow build up. I enjoyed how you describe his inner emotions and turmoil. How she dominated him was incredibly erotic and I hope you write more like it!
Great fun! Loved the slow buildup, the mixture of shame and pride and fesr and lust...
Very good read. Descriptive, and as a male, was easily able to put myself in his position with the turbulent conflicting feelings you expressed he went through as you read it.
I read it at work, and was unable to leave my desk for a short while until my arousal subsided. In that sense, your story did its job well. My wife is certainly getting some when I get home ;)
I gave it five stars for everything up to and including his forced orgasm.
But what came after that wasn't really up to the same level.
Perhaps, if he'd called her to set up another 'session' and left that as the coming attraction that was looked forward to, that'd have been better.
I'd sure like to see another chapter or six.
Please continue this story. You left yourself an opening and us with the inkling that the two girls might have their way with Carl together and figure out how to humiliate him or have him on the precipice of total humiliation. Please