All Comments on 'The Games People Play'

How old are these people supposed to be? "Daddy", "Daddy", Daddy" They seem to be just a couple of juvenile degenerates, abuse belongs in BDSM, where sick degenerates appreciate it.

to the masochist and every one is happy. TK U MLJ LV NV

Was this BDSM SHIT written by a four year old?

cuck shit.

Not much else to say about garbage.

I read a page of it and gave up trying to figure out who was fucking who. I’m sure it all makes sense to the author, but honestly it is a mess.

People come to a sex site to read fuck stories and worry about morals and story content..Just read and enjoy, no one cares about how you feel here..

illiterate cuck shit.

What a bunch of crap!!!

Very distracting. Please proofread before you post it get an editor.

It's okay. Its because it was in loving wives, a category that is far too broad in my opinion.

I was concerned with going back and forth between the two couples. I need to work on how to do that better but its necessary to get all four points of view, and even a fifth there for a little while. I will play around with it.

As far as proofreading, you get what you pay for.

Oh, and if you had troubles with this one, the next part has a crossdresser and a little Male on male. what can i say, they may not be the games you play but someone out there - The Author

Is 14 okay but 20 isn't? I'm just curious... - Auth

if you can just make it understandable and interesting. This was neither.

And I did get what I paid for, and you got what it was worth.

dumb cuck shit.

What in the hell was THAT?

Too schizo for words.

Cheating is cheating, even if both parties condone the actions. Thank goodness neither of the couples are in a long lasting or marital relationship - all things can dissolve naturally (like lust over-riding common sense or rules being dropped) and people can go their separate ways.

Don't know why this isn't in the kink cat. rather than "loving wives" as their is no loving or wives involved.

Smokepole

Of course I care what people think. I’m not after stars but I want people to get something from it. - auth

Dropping 5 names right off the bat and then running them together did make this tedious. You did a nice job on the dialogue as far as flow but all the voices sound very similar. The males calm and assertive, the females very aware and introspective. Work on their individual voices. The bi angle is going to get you slaughtered by homophobes so make sure you tag it so those come after your balls can be approoriately ridiculed like they love to be.

I will read the next part. Not that I look forward to crossdressers and hot man on man action but because you have a very conversational style of writing that I can appreciate.

I enjoyed it, I didn't really have that much of a problem going back and forth, I myself found that dynamic made the story even better. I will admit you introduced the characters quickly and then started with the alternative quickly so I did have to re-read the first couple paragraphs to get a good grip on where it was going, but after that I thought it was pretty good. Had a bit of everything in there.

Good read IMO