All Comments on 'The Going Away Party'

Then what happened? I have to know. Ok, don't worry, I'll use my own imagination. Better that way then everyone stays happy don't they.

...and then I felt my hands close around her throat...

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I agree Brit, if you can. But I would want to know for sure. Is she's that callous in fucking her crush while keeping the husband tied up, there's not much of love left.

another fetish writer hits LW with a shit story .Im sure the guy will just roll over and accept it like all the other tripe .

If I couldn't get loose to go in and beat the hell out of both of them, I would have gotten her up at 3:17 and made her call her boyfriend back - then, I would beat the hell out of him (he knew better) and then I would make her pack and leave with lover boy.

A good story, like Brit, I could guess an ending except - ?

A trusting husband, Mr. Robinson - Chapter 2 please - you wrote our character as a trusting husband?

but that is because there is nothing lower. This is not a LW story. If I had been tied up like that, she had better hope I never got loose. Revenge is hell.

Another wannbe cuckold asshole. PUT this SHIT in the FETISH category where it belongs.

You're technically good and the story flow was flawless till the end. I don't think that any man would wake so calm after an experience like that. The only flaw is you didn't layout enough back story for me to buy into the characters actions. What wife would get horny, come home, tie her husband to a bed and leave?

she really cheated? he said memory or dream, and it was really what happpend so she cheated, which makes him cuck. no need to read more this type of story. black list the author. heehee

I was for a fire to wipe them all out, oh well maybe next time.

it doesn't make a whole lot of sense. I think the story started well and then fell flat on its face.

Keep writing folks, what you damn well please.

to write the rest of the story. This is powerful stuff, a mixture of eroticism and utter sadism on his wife's part: cruel and humiliating. So what happens next?

Thanks, ohio

thanks but we have enough crap slut wimp stories...........stop and find a hobby but not stories...

Get one thing start: "people" like YOU are the bullies, the ones who think only those who think as they do are allowed to have an opinion.

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That said, if this is true, there is no marriage, there is no love. If he was tied as tightly as it seems, then the ties biting into his wrists and ankles must leave marks. If so, then the follow up from ALL of his thoughts and feelings is divorce. What she did was, for all purposed, torture. There is no love on her end. None.

Must be if you put up with this shit!

Saw the asshole hypocrite give 5 stars. Here is 1 star.

This would nearly be an acceptable excuse for double murder. Plea of temporary insanity, anyone?

Doesn't this remind you slightly of that story where the wife ties up the husband and fucks some guy he hates as revenge for his "cheating"? Forgot who wrote such a story.

But I fear you will enjoy the comments on this story no more than you did on your first. Indeed, since your first story, unlike this one, had the husband knowing and consensual I would expect this story's comments (and grades) to be quite a bit harsher.<P>

Since I like stories with a definitive ending I am not really a big fan of "the lady or the tiger" endings. I would really like to know what happened. And this story, even more than your first one, could play out a lot of different ways.<P>

Barbara gets turned on by Bill at his going away party. He isn't going far - only across town. He tells her he wants to screw her and explains he is leaving the firm in large part so he will have a better opportunity to do so. She admits Bill is the kind of guy she was attracted to before marrying hubby. She tells hubby Bill made her hot. But she resists him other than kissing and comes home to hubby.<P>

To do what? "I want to do something special for you," "I love you so much. I want to you to feel something you have never felt before." She dupes him into allowing himself to be tied up, blindfolded and gagged.<P>

Then she leaves him. Alone. Totally helpless. Unable to move or call out. For an extended period of time. Okay nothing happened. But it could have. He almost fell. He could have. He could have hit his head. Not really the actions of a loving wife.<P>

And his emotions start: Surprise, irritation, then anger. As the pain of his bondage increases, as his hands lose circulation.<P>

Of course, her next actions blow the notion of a loving wife totally out of the water. His "something special" is that she is going to fuck Bill on their marital bed in front of him. She is unilaterally revising their marriage contract. And hubby who has remained faithful has a front row seat. My, but that is SPECIAL. <P>

"My mind was swimming. I couldn't believe she was doing this. She brought Bill home and now she was going to make love to him in our bed right in front of me while I sat bound and gagged and naked in the shadows.<P>

"I was angry. And I was terrified that he would hear me breathing and discover me sitting here. I trembled at the thought."<P>

Then of course hubby, in a plot device reminiscent of JPB, has a complete character reversal and gets off on Bill fucking his wife, spontaneously coming. <P>

Sorry, that calls for a suspension of disbelief that is just too big for me.<P>

BTW his terror that Bill would find out he was there was misplaced. BILL ALREADY KNEW IT! Barbara had set him up. WHY do you think they were whispering before they entered the bedroom? You don't whisper unless you know someone is there. His "turn on the light" comment was bogus. Why? Because he ALREADY could see hubby. She lit the candle earlier.<P>

"She moved around the bed like a ghost in the darkening room. I could barely see her. And then light burst from a match and she lit a candle on the nightstand.<P>

"There that's better," she said, and then danced, almost giddy, to my closet. When she turned around she had several of my neckties in her hand and a wicked look on her face."<P>

If he could see Barbara after she lit the candle Bill could see him. And of course after he passed out do you think Barbara picked him up and put him in bed?<P>

What possible reason could Barbara have for intentionally humilating her husband in front of Bill? For letting Bill know that her husband knows she is fucking him? Could it possibly be because she likes Bill, she likes fucking him, and she doesn't intend to stop? I think it more than probable.<P>

Hubby will have to live with it or walk.<P>

Mr R you are quite evil by leaving us hanging and not giving us resolution. But on the other hand you have stirred my reactions remarkably.<P>

Thanks for sharing.

I agree with most other comments. This is Chapter 1.

It would be one thing if this was a standard cuckold story where the objective is to humiliate the husband and both the husband and wife get sexual satisfaction out of the situation. But that isn't the case here. This is sexual sadism out of the blue with no indication that it's consensual on both parts and with no provocation such as it being a revenge fuck.

I've read one other story like this involving a woman taking a strange man to her bed while she's on vacation with her husband. I think the title was "He Couldn't Believe His Eyes." But even in that story the husband reacted after being in shock by threatening to divorce his wife and the only reason he didn't was becuase the sex actually turned him on and he felt partially guilty because of his reaction. But there was SOME reaction.

And while the "Lady or The Tiger" story with no ending works some times, but most such stories don't. There's a reason why "Tiger" is a classic. I know, I know, a writer doesn't have any OBLIGATION to satisfy readers. It's purely voluntary. But have a heart.

This was a very good story. It's shocking and hurtful and moving and a tale of betrayal. I hope the writer follows up. This FEELS much more like something a writer like Ohio or DG Hear would write, a - let us say - more typical story of the impact of adultery and betrayal and the husband and wife's reaction.

Also there's a real mystery. What the wife does simply isn't anything that a wife would do in any real life situation I've ever heard of. There has to be a reason. I hope the writer follows up with another chapter, or two or three. But regardless, this is a very strong story.

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Was it a dream or a memory? I think I must read this story word by word to understand it's meaning.

Whereas in the troubadors story "Hildy" it was simple to understand.

English is not my first language so I must cope with this disadvantage. Keep on writing mr.robinson. Maybe a sequel. ;-)

I think the wife cheated on her husband and he should divorce the bitch then she can fuck Bill all she wnats and not hace to worry about tying her husband up so he cannot kick the shit out of both of them

I would despise anyone who did such action without consent. It is betrayal of the highest order. Not a turn on and as bad as a male raping a female. For me this is mind rape. Well written. Insight into character. Plot well done. Syntax well put together. The emotional impact on me is I want revenge even if the erection was there, How dare she. This kind of action is worse than most of the other affairs I have read on here. That the story had that kind of impact shows it has merit as a story just hate the kind of impact.

is she going to make love to her hubby as she said. she's a lying bitch whore. i guess this would be a turn-on for a sub-guy. with me she would die. (0). did ur mom wear the pants in the family? i bet u wont answer us that one. a dr

The suspense and tension seemed very contrived and hurried like the author was racing to get through the story, while touching on all the bullet points in an outline, so when the silly and cliched ending arrived, with all it's ambiguity, my reaction was "who cares?" and "boy was that ending contrived". This type of story needs to be paced slowly to be effective. Look, I am not a big fan of cuck stories, so maybe that is influencing my reaction...maybe I was guilty of racing through the story instead.

would he want to stay married to someone who did that to him? What a bitch...

even. To bad could have been a good story with a different ending.

I don´t like it.Too much cruel for my taste.

Next time I want a threesome with a hot babe , I'll tie my wife and bring that babe home. Why didn't I think of this sooner?

that there are guys/gals who get off on this genre. The writing was really ok, separating myself from the story. LOL...if I put myself in Bill's position, I guess I love this story!!!

Your kind shouldn't even be allowed to enter an erotic site. To give a score just to spite some other reader. You're scum, the lowest. This is still a free site, where all opinions should count, not just yours. I read for entertainment, not to bash others. Stupid people, say stupid things.

A slut wife who tues up he loyal husband so she can fuck another guy, and hubby gets a hardon? What fucking crap.

A wimp with a slut wife this is your idea of erotica? Total crap.

You sir have failed to grasp the complex thought processes of the mass of readers that HATED your story. You have invoked only ONE reaction. HATRED of you and the characters you have created. All your psycho analisis and psycho babble of your readers reaction is way off is the land of make believe. And very, very pointless. You are an over rated, over the hill freak that has an over inflated ego than anyone alive. I don't know where you thought up your comment on your on story but if you really don't care about your scores which tells all writers if they are good or bad at what they do and how they are percieved then you are a fool. If you got paid for this writing job then I could understand your reaction but you get nothing from writing stories except you turn a few sick freaks on and yourself of course. Good for you. I hope you are proud of yourself. If you wish to inspire hate with all your stories then go right ahead, you will get hatred every time so your job should be easy from now. Do NOT ever try and judge a reader and his or her reaction you will fail as many other writers have failed. You are a failure as a writer and a failure as an 'Erotic' writer. That is the judgement of MOST of the readers that voted on your story. THAT is how writers get the results. You are bottom of the league and falling fast.

I liked it and want more stories that really piss you off. maybe we'll all get our wish for Christmas, and you'll leave us alone.

I have a short list beside my computer of authors I won't read again. Your name made the list. Congratulations.

Can't say more than that.

I wish you sons of bitches would start giving the husbands their proper gender back along with their balls!!

Go the fuck away...

Wait, really? This was an experiment to provoke reaction? Whether it's love or hatred, praise or insult? Isn't that the very definition of a troll?

"I submit she cannot be judged by this character study alone. I did not – as several noted -- provide enough back story or context to for anyone to judge her actions. My apologies, but this was never intended to have a complete story arc. It was but a test of my ability to relate a complex set of emotions of a character placed under extreme stress."

Since the "author" (and I use that term loosely now) herself says that the background info is incomplete, missing vital parts that would give the reader a full assessment of everything, then this cannot be called a story either. It literally has no context to be placed into.

This test of your ability, is NOT to "relate a complex set of emotions of a character placed under extreme stress", as you put it, but to provoke the reader into a reaction, any reaction, as . A test of your ability to troll.

"Love me or hate me, just keep reading me."

That's pretty damning evidence of trolling.

And why apologize? For what? For misleading the readers into thinking this was a complete story? That was your intention in the first place. The apology rings false.

I shall not take part in your trolling experiment again.

You wrote in your first comment that this was a test of your ability (which ability, I'll leave open), AND you said "love me or hate me, just keep reading me".

What I take offense at is not the content of the story itself, but that it was written and posted out of a desire to provoke reaction (ANY reaction) out of the readers, and not out of a desire to share the story with others.

Being an unwitting test subject does not sit right with me.

I would more admire an author who submitted a plothole-riddled, grammatically lazy story, with the actual intent of wanting to share his tale, than some detached scientist who wants to see the results of his story experiment.

"That said, if I am not to your taste, don't read me."

How do I know whether your stories are to my taste, if this is the first time I read one? And THEN find out (from your own comment), that this was a human emotions experiment? "I'll throw this in, and see how they react."

Perhaps, in one thing, you are right. Maybe it IS true that every writer (who doesn't write just for himself) wants a reaction out of readers, whether good or bad. Just acknowledge the story (the author's creation, "blood, sweat and tears") and that would be good enough.

I still get the feeling that you wrote and posted this not because you wanted to share, but to see what happens.

You're right in that I am free not to read your stories, and I won't do so again, because I can't be sure whether it's submitted because you wanted to share, or as a human emotions experiment.

I'll not waste time on a story of yours again.

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I don't know what all the fuss is about. Most of the stories posted here are a display of story telling and obviously some storytellers are more skilled than others. The stories told without skill are exactly the same as masturbating. And none of the posting can seriously claim some transcending moral purpose. After all, this is Literotica, not some altruistic humanitarian forum.

Intentions aside I found this one of the hottest, best written stories I have ever read here. It would be a great story in any venue and I think you should enter it in the Playboy fiction contest.

I wish there was a rating beyond 5: You earned it

Thanks so much.

bluejacket01

Bad enough that the silly twat went out and brought home man-slut, but then AFTER her husband falls hard enought to knock himself out, she merely unties him and puts him to bed???????????!!!!!!!!!!!! No thought of concussion or other complications, just merrily, tralala, if he wakes up, great! If not, then "Next!" So, so glad this is fiction!

Very improbable, that ending. Highly meek and stupid, his behaviour. I recognize the fact that obviously too many author are using this site to spread the message: "Hey, try being a real wimp" and "being a cuck is sooo exciting". Why not react and give these meek guys some space on their own?

did the author come up with this shit. There are no indications in the story that the wife was disappointed with her marriage, so where is the motivation for such a screwy stunt ? The husband lets me himself be bound and gagged to a church without any reason given for her behavior other than is going to make love to her husband. What happens next is the exact opposite with her actions and "handsome Bill". Why would she fuck Bill in their marital bed knowing the husband could easily figure it out ?

Were I the husband at 3am when he woke up I would turn the lights and kick her ass out of the bed. In the morning I would give her 1 hour to pack her things and then kick her out. I would immediately start to get recomendations for a lawyer and would make and appointment the following monday with one. Some spook equipment I would install in the house, I would not pay for a PI. Before I filed the divorce papers I would send as much money to a Cayman account as possible.

interesting story

Not now not ever. Bye Bye Bitch!!!!!!!!

You didn't write it the divorce.

Cause she hates her husband and he deserves better

Even a pathetic spineless waste of a man would have kicked her whore ass out and sent her to live with Bill.

Husbands that sad give a bad names to men world wide. What a twat he married. If you wanted worthless characters you did a great job creating them.

Nothing here appeals to me. Just divorce her and move on.

A voyeur is just another word for cuck.

Ass end to a story that wasn't that good.

You have a talent for writing. So use it to write something decent

Rubbish

Very weird. I wasn't expecting a cuck story (or I wouldn't have read it) but I don't really understand this. Where is the context. Is there any evidence that he would like it - it seems unlikely? Has she any history in the sort of bdsm - or was it a sudden idea? What if he was hurt in the fall - did she care or know? How did she get him upstairs - did Bill help - that is a whole new can of worms? So, she brings in a work colleague, takes him upstairs and has noisy sex - how does she expect her restrained husband to react? Why isn't he divorcing her the next day - he clearly can't trust her? If he had been tied, gagged with duct tape and fallen he would be aware of the aches etc when he woke in the night. But, to be fair, the bit about dream/memory the burnt out candle was a neat touch. As I said, very weird.

Hard to follow........to much drivel.