All Comments on 'The Good Deed'

Not bad a little practice and some grammar checking.

Your story builds tension nicely to a climax. Wonderful.

Your narration shifts between past and present tense, often within a single paragraph. I'd suggest editing the piece to make that more consistent, preferably by making past tense your default setting.

I don't think that you need to worry about someone stealing your story

I enjoyed reading your story. You should post a second chapter soon.

This was petty good for a first timer. You should think about a second chapter and check your grammar, other than that it was good

Honestly awesome. Please make a part 2!

The story I have just read is beautiful, can you please write and let us know if these two young ladies become a couple and where they will live and if they get married and live a long and happy life, thank you great story.

Could be longer!