All Comments on 'The Grey Lady Ch. 05'

Good, she moved a little fast of not being being able to resist him but good. The only other thing is the way you kept you using breast and tit, you used the words like they were two different things when they're not. Most of the time when you used tit it should've been nipple.

I love this story! It's cute how protective Jake is over Samantha.

Did... Did she dream about Captain Hook?p

Good one. No. Though he does sound like Captain Hook (lol), except for what he's wearing.

Spacecowboy the word tit for nipple is used frequently when talking about animals and I believe it is also an older English word for nipple.

Will there be more chapters!?

I submitted chapter 6 and am waiting for its approval. And I am working on chapter 7, polishing and correcting errors.

Great writing with all the right pieces to be absorbing. One comment (just a suggestion knowing their first times were under "stress?") is that their lovemaking in the future might have more dialogue as between a caring couple.

Suspect as more find this great story again there will be many more comments. Would think that other original readers like myself will be reading the story from the beginning after such an hiatus and commenting on the new chapters.