by saucylover
Good bones you have here. However it was rushed at the end....but I guess that was due to the fact that you are contemplating if it should be a series. I would love to read more about these two.
I agree and think the end was rushed a bit, but this story has a lot of potential. I think you should continue with it and see where it goes. Thank you.
Like everyone else said the story seemed a bit rushed but i really want you to continue!
Told simply, but has the ring of truth hidden in it. Very likable story.
Would love to read more about these two...
Keep going and it may help to have someone look over work.. so that way you can work on ur plot and story line.. now don't get me wrong I'm liking this story too just like your other two you wrote.. so keep going and stay positive and don't let people stop you from doing what you love to do..
I'm looking forward to more. Way to build up to that apology and have it all flood out from there. :)
Please continue this story I love the beginning and would keep reading if you keep writing. You have a gift, so keep on giving.
denchers
Didn't your spell check catch that?
If you mean fake teeth that is dentures, at least in English.
Loving this so much. Please continue and finish this gorgeous love story.
I think the title states my vote. I like how you built history, the main characters, and the annoying sub characters. Good setting for a good story.
No sane person would agree to 'make love' right after chatting for a few hours. The fuck you writing?
You gave the main male character 2 different names, Gage & Greg. There a lot of spelling errors. Good story though.
Hated someone for years, they say sorry and now you love them and want to be with them forever