by Many Feathers
I think this story would have to be rated as an all time best fantasy a forty something man could have. I can only imagine what it would be like to have such a fantastic life with two hot and sexy women. The only problem I see is that I would probably fuck myself to death with in a year, but oh what a way to die. Thanks for the great story, and sharing your kinky mind with us....
Rich
As a stroke story this lacks powerful imagery; as a narrative it lacks logic. Sure, we have been given our narrator's motivation. He is a lucky guy in any man's opinion. But what about the women? They seem as one-dimensional as cartoon characters. At some point there needs to be a real story here and the women need to be fleshed out (pun intended).
I really enjoyed this story,finding it well written and erotic.The commentator who said it was boring and characters needed fleshing out, misses the point and constraints of short stories.