All Comments on 'The Hayride'

Excellent story, please continue it!

There is a great mix of emotion and lust in here which works really well. Also, your description of her orgasm is absolutely remarkable - insightful and poetic - without being distracting. Good job. If I could make a suggestion, it would be to work with an editor. Occasional typos (on character names, in particular) draw the reader back out of the story a bit, and I, for one, really wanted to stay there.

WELL DONE:

Excellent all around story, very descriptive, Sensual, Delightful and Sexy.

Spot on! Literally and figuratively! You must be a joy to know...in every sense of that word! :)

Whew ! Another hot one with a slow build up virtually in front of unsuspecting public. Please get a good editor. There are so many typos and miss spelled or wrong words as to derail one’s thoughts and ruin the moment. Otherwise a really well written sexy story. Easy 5-🍆🍆🍆🍆🍆