by laffalot
Overall it was nice, but there was one "hiccup" I noticed on page 2 where you switched the one name to Katie. Just some more careful editing will take care of that.
Overall it was very good though.
This is the best lesbian incest story I've read, please update it soon.
Excellent. Well written sex and plot. The memory flashes were nicely done, and beautiful.
That was fucking hot. I want my own sister to do this, or any lass! Yummy! Came 3 times. Mmm delish, want to lick jodis asshole myself, and then finger the shit out of it, whilst licking her clit until she came in my mouth. Finger my own ass and pussy now.
What a wonderfully tender story about the love between two damaged sisters. I was nearly in tears at times and so turned on at others. I was playing with my pussy the whole time and had a lovely cum at the end. Thank you for a interesting (and HOT!) read. ; )
I became so horny reading this, slipping my fingers in and out of my pussy then licking the amazing taste that I've never tasting, and imagining my hot 17 year old sister doing this to me, ughhh I need to buy some dildos , love love love this story Iummmmmmmmm, I can taste her core already.. beautiful write
Oh god so hot. I want a tongue on my pussy and I want to taste my first pussy after this
Nipples don't "swell with blood". They contract and become erect.
this story is so great, you could over look one little flaw
Loved the story and the way they finally got together, though I wish you'd have written about them using the strap on.
This is one of the best pieces of erotica I have ever read. Its well thought out, well constructed, well writen, rhythmic and EXSTREMLY erotic. Well done. Thank you.
JUST WISH WE COULD HAVE READ, HOW LEXI, DUMPED PRICK GEORGE AND MOVED IN WITH HER SISTER. LEAVES US TO WONDER LIKE SO MANY WOMEN IF SHE GOES BACK TO THE ABUSE. TOO GOOD A STORY, AND TOO MUCH LOVE BETWEEN SISTERS TO NOT HAVE A HAPPY ENDING.
Nice, tight writing. The entire scene maintained the atmosphere of erotica while telling some character backstory at the same time. Much more satisfying than just "Jodi fucked her sister; the end." Well done!!