All Comments on 'The Hermit Ch. 02'

Have you ever considered making it into a Nonhuman tale? He has a cabin in the woods. He could be a lone wolf, or even just live with an unseen pack. He could be on some type of a retreat, or could have been running maneuvers near an emergency cabin when he found her. The Nonhuman aspect would make for a good explanation about why he was able to deal with the two wolves that were after her. Great job so far. I am definitely intrigued. Could you make your chapters a bit longer, though?

This sounds like the start of a really good story. Who is Mr. Noah? I cannot wait for the next update.

The chapters are so short, but glad to see the update. Pretty please don't wait too long to post chapter 3. This story is really good!

Chapter was toooooo short!!!!!! More please.

YAY an update! Somewhat short but nice. Crossing my fingers on the next chapter not taking too long to show up. =)

Glad I came across this story & I'm loving it so far :-) can't wait for chapter 3, but could you make them a little longer??? :-D

I want more.

Great story! Hope to have updates sooner and longer chapters. Thank you!

OK I like your writing and hope to see more. The early anonymous feedback on Ch.1 was pretty harsh, but also kind of funny at once.I often wonder about people that post stuff like that. Anyway, I think you have the action down and a hook into at least what's going on with Lily. But it still feels like something's missing. Two things come to mind:

1. The scene is implausible with no background. Seriously.. like a risque version of Little Red Riding Hood. I almost skipped it until I saw all the positive feedback, then went back and read through. A little more about who they are and what really brought them together makes the story more real. Some readers don't care about that. To me, that's what makes a story stand out.

2. My gut feeling is that this story makes a lot more sense in your mind. That is, getting it out in written words has proven awkward and difficult. Me too LOL. A good editor/beta reader can help with that.

I hope you stick with it and flesh out the story a bit more. Good luck!

This story is so good why not finish it.

A delightful start. I would love some more.

Please continue.. You've got me enticed for look for more.

What must a reader do to get a new update. You have our attention can we please get an update.

I need the rest of this! Waaah!