All Comments on 'The Hitchhiker'

it just didn't last long enough.

I liked it while it lasted but I hate short stories and yours was very short.

Keep working on it.

But needs more story. Who is she, who is he, why should we care, what is their story (each one's story)? I guess my viewpoint is that of my children when they were little: tell me a story.

needs more flesh on the bones

Needs more chapters,

Needs better storyline,

Needs better ending,

Needs something more than a wham, bam, thank you mam,

Where did they live?, work?,

It's so unfinished sadly.