All Comments on 'The Homecoming'

"WOW" what a fantastic sexy story. love ever bit of it do hope there is a folow up to this one great bit of writing.

as for the story line that was great.

The long paragraphs make the story difficult to read

Hi again Venus,

I love incest in almost all forms as long as it is consenual. I have no complaints about the con struction of your writing. It is very vivid and descriptive. Every action passed my eyes like a movie. My prick got very hard and kept getting harder. I wanted to be the brother and fuck my sister and feel her mouth and hot wet cunt surrounding me. As you can tell I am very forthright with my comments. A good story makes me that way and your story was much more than good. No wonder you made my fucking prick get so hard. More stories Venus, more fucking stories. John P

HI VENUS,

READING THIS ONE AGAIN AND AGAIN. GIVES ME A HARD ON EVERY TIME. GOOD WRITING AND GOOD DESCRIPTIVE TALENT. READING YOUR BIO SOUNDS LIKE WE LIKE TO TALK ABOUT THE SAME THINGS SO IF YOU WOULD LIKE TO CHAT HERE IS MY ADDRESS: sfdom81@yahoo.com im also on Yahoo and MSN messenger. Keep the stories cumming. John P

i couldn't even finish the story in one paragragh alone you kept switching names first he was josh then joe then josh again then back to joe we shouldn't have to get a headache trying to keep track of your charicters thats your job and you aren't doing it very well

ohk,you had a real good topic to start witt it was good,but in the end it wasnt so good,you didnt explain their feelings that much, you explained wht they did,but not once i read a conversation that they had,do better next time(:

The characters need to be fleshed out a little more to make them more like real people, but the sex scene was very good.

I like the way she took the aggressive side and used her sexy body to seduce her brother. That was sweet.

Over all the story could have been a little longer with perhaps another sex scene with her brother screwing her brain dead. That would have been nice and shown the reader how much they loved each other after the first time.

Thanks for the good story

I like your style and would love to talk to you about your writing, I am impressed. I feel that we have much to talk about as I have written a few stories also. If you would like to contact me, I am dobermanstooth@aol.com Keep writing :)