All Comments on 'The Horse'

...pretty damn good if you ask me. Well done. Looking forward to the next part.

More more more... As soon as possible!

(Excuse me, I gotta go... Take care of something!)

I read it on the off chance of discovering a new talent. You have an excellent use of timing and back story thru this work. Really enjoyed reading it!

Will it continue or are there new characters with adventures of their own you might attempt to tell?

Keep writing if the interest is there.

A 5 star start so how soon will we see the next chapter

And then she woke up from the most erotic dream with the bullit buzzing in her pussy.....no just kidding....good start.....lots of options as to how to continue the story....a bit more sublety maybe...less husband bashing.....get her worshiping at the horse hung temple....slurping,licking,blowing.....but definitely no deep throat....8" plus dont get deep throated in real life....only praised, adored and sucked.....am intrigued to see how original you gonna be when it cums to him pounding her with his horse schlong....go for it!!!!

Five stars LOL!

just wondering why it is chopped up into tiny two page unfinished fragments.

it might tease some people, others it annoys. Just like the arrogance of jerks like Colt.

Let's hope he is more than an appendage and an ego.

STORY 2 AND HOW LONG?

Is there a part two??? REally looking forward to more of these two people..

A lot of people on Lit want this story to carry on with hard steamy, cunt and ass stretching sex with her managing to get the whole cock down her throat. I for one hope that she dreams all of that great sex and decides to straighten out her husband who decides to man up. This world can't be controlled by donkey dicks and the majority of us are good men that don't deserve to have our wives stolen. Thank you. I'll start with a 5.

My nick name in school was Horse too. The same reason. I for one please my wife though opportunities came and went. She's pretty special too.

I hate to say this but this just made my pussy explode ... where's part 2 already? Pls pls pls ohhhh need it soo badly

at least 2-3 more chapters of strong solid sexy fucking and screaming. Hurry up.

I want Clark or Brandon to do something with Colt! Plz

But I hope that is not the end of your tale because if it is then it is so LAME. For the build up only for him to show Emma the mom why he was called 'Horse' and then not to stuff the turkey is so unforgivable.

Geez!!!

John

Made my shaved pussy soaked. God I'd Love to fuck a college jock right now.

Just how does a 32 year old woman have a son who is going to college, unless she was 14 or so when she was married.

Great story. Thank you and PLEASE WRITE PART 2. I wish I was Brandon, watching Colt take my mom. Perhaps in part 2 Colt will beat up Ckark as Emna watches. Or Brandon will suck him.

When are you going to continue this story.We need at least 2 or 3 more chapters of this

Dragged out and boring, I nearly gave up forced myself to see it out, wished I hadn't.

Do you tease like this in real life?

OMG please continue this story.

Great build up and love the story. Please another chapter to this story. Thanks for a great read....

I fucking HATE incomplete stories.

i hope theres a second part

next chapter please this is a really exploiting story

But millions of people start a story. It seems the writer got to a certain point and said, gotta go, just put in a line and say THE END

That's not a story

Great story! You absolutely need to write about the rest of the visit

You seem to have a gift.

You got the windup perfectly but failed to pitch.

After the first two paragraphs i could tell that this was a 2* story. I put it down during the first reading (i thought here is a student of the MM school of f*****d up logic) . The outcome did surprise. I settled on 3.5*

This story is a perfect example of a individual who doesn't appreciate what she has. I was hoping for a good REVENGE:

The son catches them in the act, disavows the mom, and doesn't want anything to do with the roommate who needs Brandon as a tudor constantly to stay on the baseball team.

Mom tries to bring a heavy hand with 20 y/o son who in a fit of rage asks his dad why a good man would put up with a tramp..indirectly. Dad eventually catches on and asks the son who tells him what he saw. Dad is so pissed off he makes a lot of life changes...divorces the wife who had gotten bitter for no reason(frustration) , gets healthy, loses 75lbs, gets heavily into martials arts to keep the weight off.

Colt's lifee goes downhill. He hates the mom now because his ticket to the big leagues post college has evaporated with Brandon's college tutelage. Brandon is focused and determined like his dad. He gets drafted and makes the big show 2 years after he leaves college. He still refuses to have anything to do with Colt. Who ends up going to jail and becomes the prison b***h.

Brandon's problem with Colt he tried to destroy his once happy family when he could have had any girl at school he wants, but chose his mom. After the divorce Brandon's dad becomes a successful businessman with all the new focus on physical activity. He attacks his work like an opponent thinking it Colt for destroying his happy life. Previously he'd never beat him in a fight but he was good motivation going forward.

Mom is continually bitter she only gets alimony for 3 years and has to find a job. She gains 50 lbs and has lost her so called great figure because she can't spend 5 hours at the gym everyday and support herself.

Not a great life for a little fun. The writing was very good but the concept sucked. Cheers.

A complete let down and waste of time

Where is part 2 ?

You should still write the sequel to this, would definitely read.