All Comments on 'The House of Davis Ch. 00-01'

piece of garbage written by some one who is a sick piece of shit.

Mixed tense, no continuity or flow, unbelievable characters. This "writer," has no idea how to write! At the very least you should know that every time a different character speaks, a new paragraph is started. It is the most basic rule of writing! Go back and learn 3rd grade English before attempting to write again!

Another bad story with a lot of people with no morals....

Forget the bad comments. That was one guy, who has his fun to be a troll. I think the storry is not at the top but not bad too. For a first timer it is a good start. I hope to read more from you.

Looking forward to the next chapter. 5 stars

another perverted sicko writer. Don't we have enough of you scumbags polluting this category already? Practically every story posted anymore is badly written trash. What is it about this category that attracts you guys? Is it the perverted sickos that roam this site like the couple of guys that think this was a great story? Loving Wives has turned into pure shit.

HellOfAHat

Age

kindergarten

ability to write

-1