by dragontatto
I'd like to know the story of how they met and his claiming of her as a mate. I think you could develop the story above a bit, slow down the pace and make it a bit longer, but overall it was good.
Awhile?! It's been years. I thought you were dead. I've read all of your stories. Please keep writing. Do you plan to finish King's Touch?
Were they already mated and just playing or was this their first meeting? It's got some potential, but for me would need alot more detail and clarification.
This is a great start, this part is like a flashback, waiting on the rest of the story to unfold now that you have spiked our interest:-)
It's a good skeleton for padding out! Make sure you keep lots of the wild, musky masculinity in it and I will thoroughly enjoy myself! X
If you can make a longer story out of this beginning, please go for it!! Your story seems to flow, like a river and I am going to read your other stories right now.