All Comments on 'The Hunted'

The twist at the end is excellent. It ingeniously uses the tropes we've come to expect in D/S erotica for an unexpected payoff. The hot sex doesn't hurt either.

I didn't understand, however, why you switched to the third person in chapter two. I often enjoy stories that have different POVs, but those are generally written in the first person in each section (you did switch back to the first person in chapter three). Curious to hear what your thinking was.

Went to third person in Chapter Two so that I could give you both Jennifer and Sam's perspective. I also wanted to experiment with telling the story three different ways. Of course it was most effective to switch from Jennifer (Chapter One) to Sam (Chapter Three) to get the full impact of the twist.

When Samantha pushed Maggie's glass off the table, who does that so innocently? Game on. I loved the switch and point of view.

Makes sense.

Besides being very erotic, it is well written and flows easily to and from situations.

Your stories get me so hot snd bothered... And as a 23 f exploring my sexuality has become easier and easier. I absolutely love your stories and im almost finished all of them now. Only bad thing is im going to pretend the ending of this one doesnt exist :P

-E

Extremely well written , Hot as PhuK , with a lil' "Let the bad guy win every once n' a while " , Loved it ( almost forgot to jack off , almost ) Would love to work thru a 20 part series of this

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Found this story with search "hunted captured". I love to hunt and sometimes to be hunted (but not stalked).

- K

Beautiful reversal! I love seeing hubris so well rewarded!