All Comments on 'The Ice is Melting'

I really enjoyed this story! It's a bit more lurid and flowery in its descriptions than I'd normally prefer, and wouldn't suit a longer story, but it works for this one. The mother was especially well done. Nice work!

A DIFFERENT STYLE TO THIS STORY BUT WELL WRITTEN AND IT FLOWED TO AN ENDING THAT PERMEATED LOVE BETWEEN MOTHER AND SON. IF IT IS IN YOUR THOUGHTS, ANOTHER CHAPTER WOULD BE MOST WELCOMED. GOOD LUCK AND GOOD WRITING.

Great story!

I truly applaud your attempt, you clearly know how to write and construct a story and whilst it may appeal to others..it didn't quite do it for me.

You wandered off into realms of fantasy far too many times and considering how much time, emphasis and description your dreams involved, the bare few paragraphs of actually getting 'it on' really did it an injustice. It left me with the impression that this was just a long winded way to saying wham, bang, thank you ma'am.

First it's a pussy, then a cunt, all through the story these are your descriptors, then at the very end you call it a vagina. Pick one, or two and then stay with it through the entire story. I understand the need at times for more than one, but it gets distracting at times, are we reading the writings of an 18 tear old drop out, or the work of someone who actually thought through the story line and set some constants.

Great story, especially the parts describing how voluptuous and curvy the mom is... just wish the sex at the end is longer...

Really like this . Is there any part 2 planned?

I thoroughly enjoyed your story. Your descriptions, especially of the mother, were sensational. I hope this is just the beginning of a multi-part story.

I did basically enjoy your story, it was pretty well-written. I did have trouble at times detecting when the son was fantasizing from what might have been reality. So much time spent on fantasy and then, when he got the real thing it was over so fast I felt let down. Thank you for sharing, though.

You had me. I didn't realize until the end that he hadn't fucked her yet! It was all in his mind. Loved it. There should be more stories left to imagination.

another chapter