All Comments on 'The Immortal African'

break out of your "Haitian, Black, Islamic, Big Dick, African" mold. Experiment a little. you may be the most prolific author with the worst scores on Lit. I cringe every time I see your name as the author because it's ALWAYS THE SAME. Write outside of your comfort zone for once. Have a Mexican chick hook up with a suburban middle income white guy. Have a Russian billionaire fall for a Samoan girl. Build some backstory, some world, and some character. Write something to evoke emotion rather than a one shot one page stroke off. This has promise. So i'll hope for more than a 1 page conclusion where they bang and she submits to him for the rest of eternity (or the opposite) and then "The End"

Not much, a lot of intros, no action.