All Comments on 'The Inn Ch. 09'

I really love this story, there are just so many different levels of interesting content, you're always desperate to keep on reading. Cheers, I hope this on will make it to the end!

I love how you end this chapter. Simon's efforts in trying to remember this small little plot point of one of his discarded stories that could have very well turned into something important... Well, he found her!

@tmgermany: I'm always glad to hear that people want to read more! My outline for the rest of the story is pretty solid at this point, so it's just a matter of me balancing the writing with all the other things sucking at my attention in life. Thanks for commenting!

@Anonymous (Oh goody!): I enjoy catching Simon off-guard! I'm guessing a certain number of readers will see the "twist" of Leyna's identity coming, but as long as it makes Simon scramble entertainingly, I'm okay with that. More interesting surprises in the next couple of chapters too! I hope you like them as well. I really appreciate the comments. : )

I flat out did not see that twist coming. I had no reason to. Interesting!

I love this series so much. I love it. The grin that I get on my face when I see a new chapter pop up is one for the ages. Bravo, sir.

Best twist ever in the series with Leyna with person he is looking for right under his nose and how does this revelation propel Simon forward. Leyna does she have any powers or she unaware of her heritage in the series. Still waiting on Simon to get better for their hook up later in the next chapter. Keep pumping these fantastic chapters out so we can meet many new characters and see if Simon can still save the day.Cheers!

@edwards21: I never know if I'm being too subtle or too obvious! Glad I was able to surprise you. : )

@Anonymous (FUN AT INN...): Hmm ... powers ... You'll just have to wait and see! But she obviously has the power to keep Simon spellbound!

Thank you both!

Shit's about to get real...

: D

You did it really subtly, only reason I knew it was coming is there's only so many ways to build to a reveal and only two major characters, and it obviously wasn't Simon.

In future works perhaps try a more ensemble cast.

When I revise the story for publication, I'll put the initial discussion of "The Necromancer's Daughter" much earlier on, where it might be plausible for Kizaah or Ferd to be candidates. One of the drawbacks of writing on the fly chapter by chapter!

Glad you liked it, and thanks for the suggestion!

I did not see that coming! I'm absolutely loving this story!

Perfect!

Thank you!

I want you to picture a teenage girl fangirling hard over her dream pop star. In person. That, is how you made me feel with this chapter, I absolutely loved it! Now, the unfortunate part, the wait. Take as long as you need to keep up the superb quality of writing, and know you have a 200 pound man fangirling hard in eager anticipation for the next chapter!

Best of luck,

Dennis

Just be sure to dot your i's with little hearts in any fan letters you send me!

Thanks for the squeal of appreciation!

I'm enjoying myself immensely and can't wait for the next chapters. In my years on literotica, you're only the second author I've favorited. Keep up the good work!

Wow! I'll have to go check out the other one when I can take a break from writing!

Thanks for the high compliment ... I really appreciate it!

That just happened.

Or so it would seem ... !

There seems to be an art in writing cliff-hangers.Very nice one here.Completely unexpected .Ah,well bravo

Sometimes it's art, and sometimes you just kind of luck into it! As Bob Ross used to say, there are no mistakes in art, just happy accidents.

Thanks for the kind words!

It took a while for me to realize, but you're a really good writer. I know that doesn't sound like great praise but it only means I'm slow to recognize what by this time is obvious.

Thanks for all the fun chapters!

asianTou

It took me a while to realize it too!

Thanks for taking the time to say so ... praise is praise, in my book!

Hah! Great ending. I was so caught up in the scene that it was a popper stunner!

Thanks! Believe it or not, I was worried everyone would see that ending coming. Glad to know I didn't telegraph it too badly.

You're a fine writer, but I hope our hero isn't one of those wimpy cucks who gets off on other men humping his woman.

Well, I don't think Simon is exactly "wimpy," but if a guy is going to accept a prostitute as his girlfriend, it probably helps to be able to appreciate her getting enjoyment from her work. That in turn suggests that he could get at least some kind of a kick out of her promiscuity ... even if it also makes him uncomfortable.

I hope the various chapters where Leyna gets it on with other guys don't disappoint you too much!

And thanks for saying I write well, too!

I'm not sure what else to say.

Onward!

J

“Onward!” is certainly not a bad response when one is unsure what to say! Thanks for continuing to read!

Really didn't see that one coming, though I really should have.

I’ve actually been surprised that more people don’t see it coming, because I’m always nervous that my twists will be too obvious and just make people roll their eyes. But I guess I managed to pull this one off okay!

Thanks for commenting!

Well I rhought I saw that coming and wham there it was...didn't take anything away though.. glad I stumbled across this story . thanks 5/5

@bear1999: It's been ages since I revisited this story, and I'd honestly forgotten how tickled I was with this twist and with the fact that at least a goodly number of readers didn't see it coming. I'm glad your foresight didn't impair your enjoyment of the story!