All Comments on 'The Journey Ch. 02'

Conditionally, a 100. I hope you know where you are going with this story because it sure has me hooked and I don't want to be disappointed. I hope you can get a new chapter out every couple of days because I want to find out what happens to these people.

while multi story line threads is good, it is also difficult to balance.

the naked lady awakening in the dark abandoned cryo chamber has good detail and feel, but the 2 stories of the guys outside needs more background and setting. obvioously they have been out there a while, they have memories and can look around. in the cryo chamber you detail what she sees, the envioronment. but for the outdoors you didn't.